Writing Practice #1
I am starting to do some writing exercises, and this is my first one. If you have any thoughts on how I can improve as a writer I would love to hear them! Enjoy!
“Land…land…land…not as much as I was hoping for, but it’ll
do.”
“Brandon hurry up! You go first!”
“Shut up! I know I do.” I respond while playing down one of my
green lands with the picture of a misty forest. “One more land and I will
be able to get my first monster out on the field.” I think to myself. My
best friend Cory and I sit in my parents’ minivan as my dad drives us down a
windy road.
We were about halfway to our destination which was at a cabin our boy scout
troop stayed at almost every fall. Usually, we went around October or so before
the snow started to fall in the Sierra Mountains. When my dad drove it usually
took us about 5ish hours to get there. He grew up driving dirt roads in the
back country and mountains, so it wasn’t that big of a deal for him. While
driving, my friends and I would entertain ourselves by playing Magic the
Gathering, telling stories, or listening to music on our MP3 players. Mine was
red, and I got it for Christmas a while back.
Cory had just played his first land, so I played mine and ended my turn. In
the game Magic (I have always been too lazy to say the whole name) monster and
spell cards require mana to be played. Lands possess that mana but require a
turn before they can be used.
“Next turn,” I think, “and you are going down.”
“2/2 wolf,” announces Cory with a joyful glee, “and it has
hast, so 2 damage to you!” Cory jumps in his seat a little as I ticked off
two points from my life counter.
“I’ll get you for that, Cory,” I say while tapping my lands to
play my first monster. “a 1/3 spider with reach. I know your flying
monsters are coming soon. Now I am protected.”
“We’ll see,” he replies while drawing his card. “I will play
another land, and another wolf. Both attacking.”
“Drat!” I say louder than I expect as I motion which wolf my
spider was going to block. The game went on like this for another ten minutes
before he won, and we gave up trying to continue playing. The bumpiness of the
road plus the slant of the seat made it very difficult to play. “There
will be plenty of time to play once we are there.” I think as I grab my
headphones so that I can listen to some music while I watch the scenery fly by.
“2 more hours.” I hear my dad announce before my world narrowed to
the bass thumping as my first song starts to play. “Numb, Lincoln Park.
Nice.”
5 responses to “Writing Practice #1”
Brandon, I think it’s great that you’re doing writing exercises. 😊
Can you give me some context for the following?
“Land…land…land…not as much as I was hoping for, but it’ll do.”
Like, do you have 3 land cards?
And, are you using the word “much” to indicate their value, as opposed to using the word “many” as in “… not as many.. ” to mean you want more “land” cards? Though you do indicate that when you say, “One more land…”.
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I probably should have said many instead of much. Part of the exercise is to write something quickly. So I didn’t edit much.
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This is great! You are getting really good at description that makes me understand and see what’s happening!
The only thing I ask is…is it necessary to describe the ipod? I don’t know just seemed out of place. I love description but it was more a sidebar, not important to story?
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It’s possible. Lol. Figuring out what small bits of information helps a story or hinders it is difficult. Thanks for the thoughts!
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I did love it still!!!
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